Grey Bay WAC Essay: What do you think?

What do your guys think about this essay that I wrote fro school?

Dear Editors of the Grey Bay Times,

I have found evidence about the Grey Bay fish kill. Ken Unballe is the one to blame. Here is the evidence that proves my claim.

Juan Tuno tested the water downstream from the water park. He saw only 1 flea in the water meaning that the chlorine is killing them. Usually, there would be around 15-17 water fleas in a healthy water stream but there wasn’t. This is the first piece of evidence that I have.

Looking at the schedule, the chemist was supposed to come and test the water on Tuesday and they would dump the chlorine water on Wednesday. This means that the tests mean nothing because he tested the water before the dumping of the water, therefore, the test results are inaccurate and don’t prove anything.

Take a look at these emails. They prove a lot about Ken’s suspicious acts:

The Board of Supervisors are having a meeting on whether we should be shut down. We’ve got to keep the public on our side, and make this chlorine thing go away. Before the board meeting, I’m ordering the water downstream from our dump pipes to be tested for chlorine by a chemist, but check out the water slide schedule, and I think you’ll know why the chemist should only collect samples on Tuesday night!

Ken

Another one says:

I guess the idea is, that if there is water fleas, then there is not too much chlorine because they're real sensitive to it or something. Any ideas about what to do? This is getting serious!

Ken

The last one says:

I like your idea about buying a bunch of water fleas and dumping them into the water just before the kid does the test. Can you be in charge of buying them and taking care of what needs to happen? Of course, this should all be kept confidential.

PS-let’s talk about a raise for you soon!

After looking at these emails, Ken is the one to blame in every possible way. However, he’s trying to prove that his water park is not causing the fish kill. In the board meeting, he says, “Members of the Board, our water slide has been great for this area. We bring in tourists, which helps the economy, and we keep kids off the streets. We put chlorine in the water to kill germs so our water is safe for kids. We're sure that the chlorine from our water slide isn't killing the fish, and here's why:We collected a sample of the water in the river downstream from the water slide, and we had it chemically tested for chlorine. Our chemist is here with the results.”

If you looked at all the evidence, it makes sense that Ken is the one to blame for the Grey Bay fish kill, therefore, we should either shut down the water park, or tell him to stop dumping water in the river.